Join In Query Critique: Wysdom of Death

I have shared with you guys in my last post that I am gearing up for the query process for my MS Wysdom Of Death. I'm pretty excited and ready for what this process will bring good or bad. I have read everything I could set my eyes on concerning querying,and I'm ready to take the leap.

It's really true you can look at someone else work and spot all the small details they may have missed. when it comes to your own work, everything about it seems perfect. You feel you haven't missed anything. Until someone critiques and you're like...ah ha! you just can't see it.

This post is about fresh eyes, if you are reading this, it would be greatly appreciated to here your thoughts on my query, don't be gentle I like it rough ;)

Wysdom of  Death YA/Fantasy/Fiction complete at 85,000 words.

Dear:

Wysdom Asher dreams of having the perfect sweet sixteen birthday party. Instead, she receives an unwanted gift: her transformation into an angel of death.

Wary about this new life that implore her to trade Saturdays at the mall with her best friend for a key that leads to another world. A world where she's impelled to wield a powerful soul-capturing scepter used to protect and usher souls to the beyond world.

  When Wisdom cross a frienzied reaper enraged and determined to steal its life back, Wysdom finds herself on the most wanted dead list. Now when she needs them the most, the powerful gifts she has prayed everyday to have stripped away are about to be taken.
   

Wysdom refuses to be hunted. She spends her days studying why she has become this nefarious being and her nights developing her powers. Furious both that her life and the lives of those she loves is threatens. Wysdom in spite of her feelings, must defend her own life in order to save those she loves.

But she may be too late.

Thank you for your consideration

Paula Kouman

Thanks in advance, if you would like me or anyone else perusing the blog to take a look at your query please feel free to put it in the comments below. We can all use a little help:) 

The Joys of Querying

Is your query good enough?

I finally completed my ms, and I am finishing the third or fourth round of edits. I have learned several things about myself since I began editing.

1) Editing is never ending: No matter how many times I go over a chapter I always find a word I may have omitted, or misspelled. It's driving me insane.
2)Then there is the problem of rewriting a scene: when I'm done with a scene I think yes it's perfect, so I move on.  At the completion of the chapter I reread it and of course I don't feel warm and fuzzy all over anymore.
3)It's difficult to get all my thoughts on paper before I forget them.
4)I'm most inspired around 2AM, when I'm also most sleepiest
5) I tend to ask to much of my family such as; so what do you think? Tell me how that scene made you feel?  So....what do you think? I think they mostly think, they wish I would find others to read my draft or simply leave them alone.


I have been carrying a printed copy of my novel (330 pages originally) around everywhere I go. It got so bad I had my MS, a folder containing chapters I had revised and reprinted copies, and notebook paper for notes. I lugged this every single place I went...ugh!

Now I'm ready for the story to be beta read, but at the same time I'm working on my query. This is like madness in a bottle, and I take a sip every time I sit down to write this query thing. I'm sure I don't have to tell you guys how difficult it is to summarize an entire novel into 150 words. Make it sound believable, interesting, and intriguing enough that you'd imagine yourself going through what the characters in the book experience.

I've been getting help from other authors on agent query connect which is a resource an author should not be without. All in all I am having fun and I am excited about my journey.

Is anyone else out there on the query track? If so maybe we can exchange in an attempt to push back the crazies and find our way to the finish line... Let me!! 

Mom' Homemade Apple Pie...mmm mmm good!!!

 Wow 7 months, it's seems like yesterday I was--okay I'm kidding.

               Yes,  I know I experienced another disappearing act, but let me just say this in my defense, I have been working on my ms. My first completed novel, I am so proud of myself
                     *oh,thank you, it means a lot to hear you say that**
 I've been editing and revising since last month. I'm feeling really good about the outcome, and I can't wait to introduce her to the world.

I must admit I haven't done much in the last couple days, I kinda got caught up with querying. Yeah I know, not good. At least not at this moment, I know I could do more harm by querying too early. I don't plan to start bombarding agents with my ms right now. I just want to be ready.

So how have you guys been, what's the news, who has gotten published or landed themselves an agent perfect for them. Please drop in share your good new, allow me to live vicariously through you.

Anyone participation in Brenda Drake Pitch Madness tomorrow? Post your pitch so we can check it out. If you didn't know about it head on over to Brenda's blog check it out. It will be hosted on twitter from 8 to8 9/12 HASH TAG#PITMAD.

Are there any other contest going on? Drop some info in the comments, maybe someones a searching.

Get Your Pitch On!! Grand Scheme **REVISION**

Hey All,


Here is Meagan's revision chime in I'm sure the author will appreciate it!! Thanks again everyone for stopping by and sharing your thoughts...How cool are you??!!??!!






GRAND SCHEME *REVISION*


Name: Meagan
Country of residence: United States
Title: GRAND SCHEME
Genre: YA Contemporary
Word-count: 75,000

Sixteen-year-olds Bianca and Yessica make a pact to commit suicide at the Grand Canyon. Only Yessica follows through, and the lingering guilt haunts Bianca daily. When Yessica's ex finds a suicide note, his questions circle the truth. When he threatens to reveal Bianca's secret, she'll have to decide if it's worth it to keep her pain hidden anymore, or if she should finally accept help.

Get your pitch on entry GRAND SCHEME

Hey all if you haven't had the chance scroll down and critique Meagan's pitch, before she faces The Agents:).
We all know how hard it is to pitch/query let's lend a hand
Thanks in advance

GET YOUR PITCH ON WORKSHOP

I'M A HOST BLOG FOR

YAtopia and Down Under Wonderings are coordinating GET YOUR PITCH ON. a chance to skip the slush pile.  A snippet of information from YAtopia:

Here's the rules:

• Your manuscript must be complete, polished and ready to query - this means no first drafts or almost finished manuscripts.
• It must be YA.
• When the contest goes live on October 15th, post your entry details in the comments section of either YAtopia or Down Under Wonderings - each blog is accepting 100 entries only.
• Your entry detail needs to include a 50 - 70 word pitch.
• You can enter more than once if you have more than one complete, polished, ready to query manuscript.

Just as it's important to get someone else to look over your manuscript before you query, it's a good idea to get feedback on your pitch before you post. We have about 26 blogs who are ready to help you hone your pitch. These workshops start on October 1.


I'm one of the 26 blogs hosting pitch feed back October 1!

Want more information? Check it out

Want to be a host for the Get Your Pitch On polish? Sign up here.

Looking for other blogs hosting the Get Your Pitch On polish? They're here.

I'm not participating as my MS is still a WIP, but I can't wait to finish all these contest are so exciting and the information you can take away is invaluable. Good luck to all the participants!!!
I'll share more information as I get it. Be sure to bookmark YAtopia and Down Under Wonderings for the latest news.